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    dots Submission Name: so smoothdots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Comedy
    Total Views: 368
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 838



    Description:
       im just teasin my guy. he is smooth. i guess its his old mc name buit its cool. i still think im a better writer than him. love you baby


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    dotsso smoothdots
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    you think you're just so smooth
    i think you should go back to jiffy lube
    and get a new groove
    you words dont soothe
    they burn it scratches
    like a box of lit matches
    you think you're cashin
    but guess what, you're trashin
    you're movin too fast and
    you aint lasting
    you're crashin
    now you're dashin
    to get away
    maybe to save face
    maybe you're still tryin to get first place
    i gotta tell you that you lost this race to me
    my words flow freely
    you never could beat me
    you could never be me
    but i could be you
    i could be the new smooth
    i could be the one with a better groove
    i embarrassed you so much that you moved
    so now who's so smooth???




    Submitted on 2007-05-19 15:39:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You have really been getting down with the rap lyrics and I'm glad you're writing.

    I hope you and your man keep the battle to the pages and have love,peace,joy&smiles to share together

    tif

    Are you ok?
    | Posted on 2007-05-23 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      hahaha, alrighty; chill. Deffinately more of a rap feel, than anything else. Sorry, but i aint got nothin else to say; peace
    | Posted on 2007-05-23 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]


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