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    dots Submission Name: Because you'd want me to be happydots
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    Author: wilted_flower
    ASL Info:    22 f uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 42/56/28
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 760
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 484



    Description:
       It's not well written because right now i can't think straight.


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    dotsBecause you'd want me to be happydots
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    Black roses for a broken heart,
    Empty words that play their part,
    Cold comfort in the light of day
    And breath catching on what to say,
    Arms there, just to hold you tight,
    But still you'll sit alone and cry at night,
    An empty void, a barren space,
    A distant light that doesn't reach this place,
    But I will forget the pain and sit a while
    And hope in heaven you can see me smile...







    Submitted on 2007-05-19 16:13:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Pretty good poem about loss. I've never really had a friend die so far so i can't really relate Only grand parents who were old and cancer striken. sorry for your loss. The old part I thought could be ammend was "arms there" I know what you're saying but it's just written a little akward. peace
    | Posted on 2007-06-12 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, its ed. Really like this, just wish didnt make me feel so depressed reading it. keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2007-06-01 00:00:00 | by Lord Bane | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a nice little piece you have here my dear. Its really beautiful, simple but there is beauty in simplicity. Sorry about your loss.

    Kudos,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2007-05-21 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a beautiful poem, Fleur, and one can feel the heartfelt emotion.
    | Posted on 2007-05-19 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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