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Macrocosm Doorways


Author: mrmundane
ASL Info:    20/m/vancouver bc
Elite Ratio:    2.4 - 47 /96 /78
Words: 88
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Macrocosm Doorways



these stars never made more sense to me
believin what i'd started to disbelieve
static evenings left down storm-drains
retrieving hours of memories thrown away

my baggage left at the side of your house
dreams never poured out so aggresive
tonight our hearts ignite into flames
rekindled by the stars of endless youth

colours of red shouldn't make you regret
that this was the shadow of our reason
all the tears of laughs can melt these things
running from only leads us to freeze them




Submitted on 2007-05-20 02:43:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  all the tears of laughs can melt these things
running from only leads us to freeze them


I think this was a good conclusion to this, the feeling was simple and it was accurate to convey is simply as well.

| Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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