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Sonnet - The Hues of Love

Author: deathbroken
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Very difficult, trust me when i say that.

Sonnet - The Hues of Love

Leaves of burgundy floating to the ground
Soaring through the air, something so little
It creates a distinction, without sound
Reminds me of love, something so brittle

Let not the power of love be shattered
Of love intertwined gently together
Let not the terms of woe be recited
Before the crimson canal grows wider

Let the cyan sky only shine brighter
For complications are sure to arise
Pursue the hearts guidance to safe shelter
And work through hardships no matter what size

No longer a figment of fantasy
Dreams will transform into reality

Submitted on 2007-05-20 05:29:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is excellent, Kimberly! It does look difficult to write, but I believe you have "mastered it"! This was a delightful story and a delightful poem!
| Posted on 2007-05-20 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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