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    dots Submission Name: Split in Halfdots
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    Author: skinnard
    ASL Info:    22 male New York
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 38/76/49
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 965
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1209



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    dotsSplit in Halfdots
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    I'm forced to walk

    On a broken path

    The angel and Demon

    I'm split in half



    Kind at heart

    The hidden code

    My feelings shown

    This is me unknown

    I care too much

    And with you I cry

    The pain builds up

    Into an endless pile



    I'm forced to walk

    On a broken path

    The angel and Demon

    I'm split in half



    I'm the dregs of the world

    As I sing my dirge

    While in your hearts

    And your blood I splurge

    I search out pain

    I crave for blood

    I push away

    The ones' I love



    I'm forced to walk

    On a broken path

    The angel and Demon

    I'm split in half



    I care for you

    But you must go

    Because the demon inside me

    Just doesn't know





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