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    dots Submission Name: Hearing the Silencedots
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    Author: skinnard
    ASL Info:    22 male New York
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 38/76/49
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 876
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsHearing the Silencedots
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    I'm hearing these screams

    louder and louder

    painful, agonizing

    making me cower

    I'm hearing these screams

    from ones who suffer

    the lost child

    the heartbroken lover

    I'm hearing these screams

    can you help me save them

    but you dont hear it

    ignoring the silence

    I'm hearing these screams

    overtaking my head

    these screams tormenting

    as they join the dead

    I'm hearing these screams

    as you ask what's wrong

    I fall to my knees

    lost in this song

    I'm hearing them scream

    death will set you free

    and then I realize

    these screams are me





    Submitted on 2007-05-20 10:42:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is one of my favorites hun. u did a great job and i love the twist u put on the end. it leads u in one direction thinking u have an enemy but in the end u realize "its me". great job tho. :)


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    PB
    | Posted on 2007-06-01 00:00:00 | by my_worst_fear85 | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh my god...this is really good. It's like you're feeling aware of the pain around you but others don't. Like WD-40 said, you realize then you need help too. There are some parallelism probs but they're minor. so good write!
    | Posted on 2007-05-21 00:00:00 | by Keller | [ Reply to This ]
      nice poem yo. Its good to feel cuz if we didnt we would have no cause.


    yeahhh good write. I like how the poem goes that u feel for every one and wanna help them all and then at the end u realize u need the help ur self tooo.

    peace
    Grim
    | Posted on 2007-05-21 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]


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