this is one of my favorites hun. u did a great job and i love the twist u put on the end. it leads u in one direction thinking u have an enemy but in the end u realize "its me". great job tho. :)
Oh my god...this is really good. It's like you're feeling aware of the pain around you but others don't. Like WD-40 said, you realize then you need help too. There are some parallelism probs but they're minor. so good write!
nice poem yo. Its good to feel cuz if we didnt we would have no cause.
yeahhh good write. I like how the poem goes that u feel for every one and wanna help them all and then at the end u realize u need the help ur self tooo.
Submission Name: Hearing the Silence
