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    dots Submission Name: pink, fiery hellsdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotspink, fiery hellsdots
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    there's an immortal fog
    that reminds me of your eyes
    it was once in berkley
    then moved to thailand in the late 60's

    when things change
    they often disassemble
    in the same way that
    things are near to eachother
    only to the degree
    that they are exactly alike

    the secret of the whole world is
    that we have only seen the back of it
    like i stare at
    the back of your eyelids all the time
    with the swelling brew of thunder
    on your breath

    or how even at the local shy
    you can't stop looking at me
    with those busted birds of yours
    the ones you wear with so much pride
    (and not the good kind)

    you often remind me
    of the pink, fiery hells of children




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      you rob me of breath. you sever blood from my veins. this is by far on eof your GREATEST peices ever. the last two stanza's are pure geniouse. the pink firey hells of children how daring. how aptly put. like milton, like shakespear. your busted burds. i melt and the specificts in the first tstanza grounds the poem in our hearts and minds. all the meaning s behind the back of her eyes lids.

    geniouse, i genuflect before your talent
    | Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice, very nice. Adore the second stanza! Danke! Just magnificent. How long did you work on this?
    | Posted on 2007-05-21 00:00:00 | by Sync | [ Reply to This ]


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