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    dots Submission Name: How I feeldots
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    Author: kapri49
    ASL Info:    16/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 31/69/30
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       This isn't great but I like it...It's about my dad...any and all comment are appreciated


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    dotsHow I feeldots
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    I'm hating you, and you know you deserve it
    I'm missing you, Oh how sick I feel

    I'm crying these tears just for you, and I know I've earned it
    I love you, Oh the disgust I feel

    I say I'd be okay
    If you turned and walked away,Do you know I'm lying to myself
    I scream that I don't care, Oh how I wish that it were true

    I hate everything you are, I know it's what I am
    I'm loving you, Oh how I hate myself

    I'm tired of waiting, I hope you know it's too late
    I'm not trying anymore, Oh the disappiontment I feel




    Submitted on 2007-05-21 01:31:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      When I read this poem, it hit so close to home for me....I understand your feelings.
    It's a good poem, you manage to get your point across with just a few peircing words.
    It's good that you can express yourself so well, wish we were all like that.
    Keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2007-05-21 00:00:00 | by mysterious one | [ Reply to This ]
      How I feel is alright. honestly its not hard to see where your coming from... but as far as the hate you seem to be holding back... Personaly there could be more emo to this wright... the line "I say I'd be okay" you dont sound as tho you actualy belive what you are wrighting ... the underlying emotion should rise to the surface...

    -Cricket
    | Posted on 2007-05-21 00:00:00 | by Cricket | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this a lot. i know a lot of people will relate to this. i hope everything works out. they said love and hate is the same thing only now you hate them because they hurt you. we know if they apologized and tried to make it better we would forgive them.



    tina
    | Posted on 2007-05-21 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]


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