I like the line,"A peaceful place of fantasy." Yes that is the branding iron that separates the front line of battle from the loss of sanity.
There is quite a shock greeting on return home to find that the war one returns from in seek of freedom is reenacted on the doorsteps of home.
This tells me that one has to be ever vigilant in order to preserve that peaceful place of fantasy.
I like the way you have broken prose into quatrains so the reader can reminesce .
im not sure what to think of this piece. i dont know where your country is or which country you are referring to here. i dont know.
however i have just finished reading a book called Afghanistan - Where God Only Comes To Weep and it was the most amazingly written book ive read. the story was also very captivating and i could tell it to be real. in the book it spoke of those who went to fight in the mountains against the invading russians and then later on in the book how various sects of this mountain home front started fighting each other... brother against brother... father against son. thats what this piece made me think of.
now normally i detest 4 line stanza pieces. i really do. i find it to be some kind of cheap magic formula that does poetry no justice. but i almost think you have used it for your benefit here. i really do.
i think its sad the jaded tone of the narrative voice... just another battle ground... thats no way to live.. thats not what existance should be...
i think you get a lil off track toward the end somehow. i cannot work out how but it just doesnt seem as crisp and the meter doesnt flow as well as the start.