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    dots Submission Name: Forgettingthedetailoflovelessmemorydots
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    Author: rAbit
    ASL Info:    18/m/Tx
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 84/91/38
    Words: 290
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
    Total Views: 797
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1274



    Description:
       ....tablets of poison, spill in my drink.
    they said "it was accidental"


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    dotsForgettingthedetailoflovelessmemorydots
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    the time is slipping, I held her up to the light.
    discretion of beauty, the light is so bright.
    we walked down this hall,
    guided by this lonely lifeline.
    it's narrow, and its addicting
    we severed it,
    yet it flows freely.

    take the time...
    look inside
    read the love
    among my sadistic lullabys.

    memory plagues me blue
    love sick
    and suicidal.
    april showers. although it's may
    hung till I flew.
    and released at the fall.

    her voice flew over airwaves
    my heart stopped..and exploded.
    i whisper my meanings
    I announce my love

    praticing for my funeral day
    I remember the steps..
    I remember my placement
    the speech i won't say
    and anxiety i won't be feeling
    first one to get it right.
    lazy..lethargic...,
    laying down...
    in my pretty black cloth.
    i remembered the steps
    I remembered the placement
    even the speech i won't say
    and the anxiety that won't fit.




    Submitted on 2007-05-21 04:06:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nik this [censored] sucks it isnt [censored] to what you usually do... hell my writes suck Ass but not nearly as badly as this [censored] up does... You may think that I am being a [censored] [censored] but oh [censored] well right? I just noticed that this was the only write with out any comments and for good reason... kindness... but I cant do that [censored]...
    | Posted on 2007-06-16 00:00:00 | by Cricket | [ Reply to This ]


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