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    dots Submission Name: this feelindots
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    Author: Oracle
    ASL Info:    24/ F /NY
    Elite Ratio:    4.63 - 423/313/46
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
    Total Views: 986
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 558



    Description:
       half of a song...just looking for first thoughts


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    dotsthis feelindots
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    i.
    i like the feeling
    of the wind blowing through my hair
    i
    i like the feeling
    of knowing that you are here

    hello.hello my love.

    september is summer for lovers
    it's heat for lasting memories

    september is tuesday's black hummer
    and how i wish to always be there

    i.
    i like the feeling
    of the wind blowing through my hair
    i
    i like the feeling
    of knowing that you are here

    hello.hello my love.




    Submitted on 2007-05-21 10:49:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wind blowing through hair is a really tired cliché; but the black hummer is a good bunch of words-and-image. I feel a memory that drives in and out your mind's streets ;and the wind - it's Time. The other good bit for a song is "Hello my love!" Yes I would love to hear this song!
    | Posted on 2008-02-25 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      My first thoughts... it's really difficult to envision a song without knowing the genre. This song could go anywhere from counrty to rap. But the style of music would greatly affect how one views the song. I think it has potiental, esspecially since you said it wasn't yet finished. But to know the genre would be mind settling for me.

    ~orange
    | Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]


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