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this feelin


Author: Oracle
ASL Info:    24/ F /NY
Elite Ratio:    4.63 - 423 /313 /46
Words: 80
Class/Type: Lyrics /Passion
Total Views: 1182
Average Vote:    4.0000
Bytes: 558



Description:


half of a song...just looking for first thoughts


this feelin



i.
i like the feeling
of the wind blowing through my hair
i
i like the feeling
of knowing that you are here

hello.hello my love.

september is summer for lovers
it's heat for lasting memories

september is tuesday's black hummer
and how i wish to always be there

i.
i like the feeling
of the wind blowing through my hair
i
i like the feeling
of knowing that you are here

hello.hello my love.




Submitted on 2007-05-21 10:49:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wind blowing through hair is a really tired cliché; but the black hummer is a good bunch of words-and-image. I feel a memory that drives in and out your mind's streets ;and the wind - it's Time. The other good bit for a song is "Hello my love!" Yes I would love to hear this song!
| Posted on 2008-02-25 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
  My first thoughts... it's really difficult to envision a song without knowing the genre. This song could go anywhere from counrty to rap. But the style of music would greatly affect how one views the song. I think it has potiental, esspecially since you said it wasn't yet finished. But to know the genre would be mind settling for me.

~orange
| Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]


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