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    dots Submission Name: Cravingdots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 255
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 581
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1765



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    dotsCravingdots
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    Youíre my drug,
    Like breaking the habit,
    Iím going through a hard withdrawal,
    My goal is quitting,
    But I just canít grab it,
    When the cravings for you start to gnaw,

    I remember,
    You and me,
    Like ecstasy,
    A strong drug left,
    Just to mess with me,
    You tempt me,
    With your knowledge,
    Of how my mind goes,
    Where it wanders,
    Who but you really knows?
    How your smoke rises,
    And where the wind blows?
    How youíre taken in,
    And the high you give flows?
    You are the substance,
    Which Iím strung on,
    The hard buzz-sense,
    Of which Iím hung on,

    Youíre my drug,
    Like breaking the habit,
    Iím going through a hard withdrawal,
    My goal is quitting,
    But I just canít grab it,
    When the cravings for you start to gnaw,

    I was left outside,
    To go away and hide,
    And here alone I find,
    Myself withering,
    Addicted forcefully to you,
    Because you always knew,
    The way I was shivering,
    And so,
    It was just this monotony,
    That kept stopping my,
    Held me tight,
    In the night,
    Like a prophecy,
    You are the substance,
    Which Iím strung on,
    The hard buzz-sense,
    Of which Iím hung on,

    Youíre my drug,
    Like breaking the habit,
    Iím going through a hard withdrawal,
    My goal is quitting,
    But I just canít grab it,
    When the cravings for you start to gnaw,

    This is my craving,
    Iím out of control,
    Iím way past saving,
    Iíve given my soul,
    So this is my hangover.




    Submitted on 2007-05-21 12:18:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really like it flows nicely and sound really good. Nice wright..
    | Posted on 2007-05-23 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked how you poem flowed, its really good
    | Posted on 2007-05-21 00:00:00 | by Nessyjane | [ Reply to This ]
      There were some things you did here that were really creative, and for the most part you put a creative spin a tired topic. But to me the rhyme scheme seemed sort of uneven, like you didn't really have a clear pattern in mind. Also, there's absolutely no need to have a comma after every line. Use punctuation sparingly.
    | Posted on 2007-05-21 00:00:00 | by lithium_poetry | [ Reply to This ]
      this is pretty good, I like the rhyming, keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2007-05-21 00:00:00 | by soul_driven | [ Reply to This ]


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