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    dots Submission Name: Watching Youdots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 595
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1474



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    dotsWatching Youdots
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    If thereís one thing you know how to do,
    Then you definitely know how to tempt,
    Everyone is so affected by you,
    And I myself am not exempt.

    Check yourself, porcelain,
    You know Iím watching you,
    Youíre on my mind,
    Have you been watching, too?
    And all this time,
    I have been on my own.

    When you get down the truth,
    And it all goes down
    When you get down to the truth,
    You canít even frown,
    It hurts but you canít frown to the truth
    When you sweep the dust,
    Thereís a fist, and thereís lust.
    Weíre battered fighters,
    Broken by broken trust.

    Check yourself, porcelain,
    You know Iím watching you,
    Isnít this a crime?
    You have been watching, too.
    We both find,
    Neither of us wants to be alone.

    If thereís one thing you know how to do,
    Then you definitely know how to tempt,
    Everyone is so affected by you,
    And I myself am not exempt.
    Donít think I canít understand,
    And read the signs,
    I can read much more than,
    In between the lines,

    Check yourself, porcelain,
    You know Iíve been watching you,
    Youíre on my mind,
    You have been watching, too,
    All of this time,
    Because neither of us wants to be alone.
    Iím lost-
    With you Iíll always know my way home




    Submitted on 2007-05-21 12:19:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i enjoyed this. very descriptive and it flowed nicely. well put together.
    | Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by skinnard | [ Reply to This ]
      this was a good write... i really liked it.... the flow was good and the emotions were quite strong...i really enjoyed reading this....

    awesome job!!!!

    cheers
    kaz
    | Posted on 2007-05-21 00:00:00 | by submarine | [ Reply to This ]


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