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    dots Submission Name: T.Y.C.dots
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    Author: Cricket
    ASL Info:    19/F/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    2.48 - 81/51/27
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 720
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 532



    Description:
       personal experience


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    dotsT.Y.C.dots
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    They told me what to think
    They told me what to feel
    They even told me that freedom was no longer real

    The only thing they could take away
    Was my burning grey green fire
    With it be from hate or desire

    Life is nonexistent so all remains quite
    The only colors are shades of grey
    Lights the only way to tell the night from day

    They told me to just close my eyes
    Silent screams dipped in blaspheme
    Ongoing unnoticed catastrophe




    Submitted on 2007-05-21 16:17:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I should of busted you out.
    we could have went to canada.
    but otherthan...
    I like it..no matter what you say.
    it's feeling and texture.
    | Posted on 2007-05-21 00:00:00 | by rAbit | [ Reply to This ]


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