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    dots Submission Name: Insanitydots

    Author: Specdro
    ASL Info:    28/Of Course/NY
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 21/53/38
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 894
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    He speaks his speech that he’s spoke before
    A single tear drop caresses her cheeks contour
    She doesn’t believe him but she lets out a sigh
    He already knows that she will give him another try
    She really loves him and he loves her
    Even though he doesn’t offer any diamonds or fur
    Deep down inside she knows he really cares
    But his actions keep driving her farther into despair
    Doing the same thing time and again
    Each time expecting a different end

    Submitted on 2007-05-21 17:37:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very talented and origanal, and more of a depressing poem, it is well worked, and towards the end, I can tell where the title comes into place. Its like a love hate romance almost. Honestly, I don't really know how to comment on this one, and I am sorry that my comment is so vauge, I apologise, it was wonderful, but I should say that this type of poem may not be of my taste, but I shall look at your other writes.
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]
      like i said i really like this piece, its very much like the piece i wrote a few days ago. i love it because i can relate to it, it hurts being in that position because im there now. to love someone with all your heart and soul but in return youre not sure where they stand exactly, they "love you" but you really have to wonder how much? overall you did a great job on it. :)

    | Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by my_worst_fear85 | [ Reply to This ]
      It seems as though you have talent but this is not very original...there is some talent but in this wright its like you were not feeling completely in to it... I totally understand if you wern't ... I almost never am any more...
    | Posted on 2007-05-21 00:00:00 | by Cricket | [ Reply to This ]

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