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    dots Submission Name: honey mixed with spitdots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 248
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotshoney mixed with spitdots

    some nights
    the hydrometeors of my eyes
    swell heavy behind their lidded births
    i push them back
    levee them with all the rest
    saving them for the girl with the vile
    who comes to collect them
    for her good luck futures

    words haunt me
    like it's a slippery universe
    the one that happily ever after
    i never planned for

    i wonder
    if natasha is on fire again
    or if it's just a trick of my perspective
    like cold fusion cups of light
    rushing out the fingertips
    when the days are done

    one day the days will gather
    the seeds of the feeding
    which brought them about
    tiny poison pellets
    of love

    the most poisonous
    of poisons

    hands are all over me
    wherever that is
    & i hush them with my only tongue
    when the honey mixes with the spit
    there's a sweeter sense of heavens

    i have walked right out
    into the broken sun
    & wished it would swallow the moons
    of my broken blood
    inhaling the eyes of my hidden lover
    along the way

    Submitted on 2007-05-21 18:07:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      although it was moving. it seemed inconsistant. atleast relating to the title. it was sweet and uncertain. i do like it tho.
    | Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]

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