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    dots Submission Name: Trustdots
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    Author: Childe-Wrote
    Elite Ratio:    1.86 - 17/47/39
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTrustdots
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    These walls are up
    They aren't collapsing

    This trust don't exist
    They are not here

    And you comment
    And you wonder

    You fail to even understand
    It's not hard.. I just don't care

    This river's rushing
    A strong undertow

    These wounds won't heal
    They leave a mark

    And you wonder
    Why I don't trust

    Dishonour's there
    They stop and fight

    This trust doesn't exist
    It has faded as did time

    These walls won't cave
    They stand tall and strong




    Submitted on 2007-05-21 22:24:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      coool write.

    "These walls won't cave
    They stand tall and strong "

    thats goood my wall breaks and then i rebuild iyt and then iyt breaks again. I like this poem because your walls dont break in iyt.


    laterrr
    Grim




    | Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]


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