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    dots Submission Name: Broken Heart óżdots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    Description:
       I Cant Do Anything Except Write Just How Much I Love & Miss You!!!!


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    dotsBroken Heart óżdots
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    im trying to pick up the peices you left me in
    its not as easy as i thought
    your just some stupid guy it dont mean shit
    i was wrong the day i fell in love
    i broke down the walls i spent many years building
    thought it would be safe to trust you
    ohh i was wrong!!!
    laying on the floor mascara down my face
    photos, presents, flowers scatterd round the room
    a broken mirror says it all
    nobody will know the pain ive gone through
    just how much it hurt to lose you
    im sorry i couldnt be the girl you wanted
    the perfect angel from you dreams
    im just me theres nothing more
    accept me now dont cut me down
    im not gonna change ive changed enough
    you've proven to me that love means nothing
    and once again im at the start left alone
    picking up the peices of another broken heart




    Submitted on 2007-05-21 23:20:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it. its descriptive and easy to understand. its also full of emotions, which is great.nice write
    | Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by skinnard | [ Reply to This ]


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