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    dots Submission Name: make things rightdots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
    Total Views: 780
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 736



    Description:
       i cant stop writing about him


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    dotsmake things rightdots
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    the day has come to say good-bye
    for you no longer need me
    the time and love i gave to you
    just didnt mean anything
    i gave you everything i had
    but it was never enough
    because in the end i am alone
    and you dont seem to care
    my life my heart my soul
    everything i had
    has gone up in flames
    with no one to put it out
    i hold my heart in my hand
    scared of the choice to make
    do i try and make things ok
    or do i make this the end
    thinking of the words to say
    to make me feel alright
    i wish it all would be over
    im ready to give up this fight
    for i will always love you
    wont you make things right




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