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    dots Submission Name: Like the Swallowdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 780
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 389



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    dotsLike the Swallowdots
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    A pebble,
    my hands
    flick of the wrist
    and

    skip skip skip


    three times
    I must have done something correctly

    Every tie
    of time
    must be tied

    with my hands


    and I would like to swallow,
    like the swallow
    that walks away, instead of flying




    Submitted on 2007-05-22 10:29:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Walks away instead of flying. A choice we so often have to make. more so in our younger years. From this poem it seems as though you didn't just fly but stood your groung accepting your choice.
    | Posted on 2007-05-23 00:00:00 | by chilz | [ Reply to This ]
      this was pretty, and sounds like something that you would come up with on friday nights.....

    i really dont think there is much to critique....it was a simple and pretty peice....

    you did a nice job, jaz...

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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