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    dots Submission Name: ScreenPLAYDOORTHINGY: LIFEdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 258
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    dots ScreenPLAYDOORTHINGY: LIFEdots
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    Moldy bread is a dangerous thing to ingest, don't do it.
    I'de rather you not vomit your insides out, t hank you. I would wish for nothing more than your better health.

    And who would care that what I am saying is important to me, that it means something, is a great literary truth to me. I have my own allusions, no one knows, I guess they aren't brilliant at all.
    Because there are so many illuions, allusions

    purely celestial clarity
    THERE IS NO BETTER TIME THAT NO
    W
    Outside the door, crickets awaiting, just sitting, chirping at a night with clear starry stars sitting in the sky also waiting, for what?
    for me? Why do they want me to come out there? It is nothing. So I should walk out here, and when I reach the door, I get a splinter in my hand, and when I smear it with anti bacterial cream, it is better. So that's the jist of it. You go on, and on, and if you were to fall, undoubtedly you will at least once ( I did see a lovely Saint set out for the night and grasp it with her lovely porcelin skin, and she made it through all right...but) and I k now it isn't going to hurt, it will just be a scratch at the most, and when I do fall I can get right back up and the time it takes isn't relative at all. Its over quickly.





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      Why do they want me to come out there?


    That's what we all want to know...it does seem like those noisy little [censored]es call to you, huh?
    | Posted on 2007-06-20 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      Moldy bread is a dangerous thing to ingest, don't do it.
    I'de rather you not vomit your insides out, t hank you. I would wish for nothing more than your better health.
    '''''''''''''''''''''''''''
    Unless it is moldy rye bread.




    And who would care that what I am saying is important to me, that it means something, is a great literary truth to me. I have my own allusions, no one knows, I guess they aren't brilliant at all.
    Because there are so many illuions, allusions
    ''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''
    I care a pretty good bit about what you say. You are one of the people I run to when I need another persons view point on something. Thanks for that. I can't do it with most everyone else.



    purely celestial clarity
    THERE IS NO BETTER TIME THAT NO
    W
    '''''''''''''''''''''''''''
    I agree. Hesitation is bad.



    Outside the door, crickets awaiting, just sitting, chirping at a night with clear starry stars sitting in the sky also waiting, for what?
    ''''''''''''''''''''''''''
    For you to open the door and go outside to play your guitar with them.



    for me?
    '''''''''''''''''
    And your guitar.



    Why do they want me to come out there?
    '''''''''''''''
    To play music.



    It is nothing. So I should walk out here, and when I reach the door, I get a splinter in my hand, and when I smear it with anti bacterial cream, it is better.
    '''''''''''
    I got a splinter in my eye one time...





    So that's the jist of it. You go on, and on, and if you were to fall, undoubtedly you will at least once ( I did see a lovely Saint set out for the night and grasp it with her lovely porcelin skin, and she made it through all right...but) and I k now it isn't going to hurt, it will just be a scratch at the most, and when I do fall I can get right back up and the time it takes isn't relative at all. Its over quickly.
    '''''''''''''''
    Its over quickly once you do it. Jumping in is the hard part. It's only gonna be cold for a few seconds.

    If you go outside to serenade the crickets, take your jacket.
    | Posted on 2007-05-23 00:00:00 | by Derrick Thomas | [ Reply to This ]


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