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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 251
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1004
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    I am a child again. I step onto the bus. I listen to music. I watch as my own Tara opens up to me. Fields and Mountains surrounding every corner of this world. I sigh and wish for some outlet for the bubbling ecstacy that this place seems to bring to me now. The air is still and cool, saturated every fiber and cell of my being.

    I observe different pigments of green, in the mossy trees, reflecting in pools of water, on blades of faded and dirty winter grass. I think on different things. I think on the lovely reflections in the river.

    I love the river, the river I believe, loves me. I picture myself crawling through the tiny bus windows, floating out, flying down into the bath of glitter and smiles.

    I swim down.

    Rushing to the bottom, tossing and turning I reach for the mussels at the muddy floor. These are rare mussels, they only live here and no where else in the world. In my river. My paint rock river.

    Drenched and airless, I float down into myself, still sitting on brown leather seats.
    Trees fly by me as we gain momentum. THey fly...swoosh, swoosh, swoosh...by me.

    From this seat I look out and observe every joy in this morning. I float, with a hidden smile, behing my stone face, the rest of the way down the ribbon of concrete, to my destination.





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      Its really moving if anything o.o
    kinda scares me though. lol :P
    all around, its a well written piece.
    | Posted on 2007-07-10 00:00:00 | by Fernando Corto | [ Reply to This ]
      This is right up my alley and I, too, feel so taken in and inspired of and by nature and I spend most of my free time at the river.

    I didn't relate the title to the piece but that is not so important.

    I enjoyed this piece and think I'll go down to my river (yes, the love is there!) and do some swimming and surrendering!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-05-23 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      i love the way you wrote this...
    its wistful and imaginative, and the imagery is exquisite

    i love it
    oxox
    | Posted on 2007-05-23 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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