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    dots Submission Name: Satisfactiondots
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    Author: nansofast
    Elite Ratio:    5.7 - 2351/2103/268
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    Description:
       it's more like a prose poem
    any ideas are fine, and thanks!


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    dotsSatisfactiondots
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    it seems love is aligned with satisfaction
    being satisfied with one's own soul
    is to experience true love
    consumerism creates need also
    we're all looking for satisfaction: it is sold
    by numerous merchants along the way

    it was because I watched you seeking
    obsessively, continually, for something extra
    fishing for something more
    more than a mystic's passion for God
    more than a seer's fancy for adventure
    more than love's direct current applied
    to the human condition

    let me be the one to reveal
    how easy life is if you simply
    awaken those children inside of you
    the ones you put down for a nap
    way back in time
    when you were so busy doing business,
    so busy taking yourself seriously,
    when you cracked open your first bottle
    of "my ego's purpose" and slammed it down
    all the way to the pisser
    go now, and wake them up
    they know the essence of being delighted
    in this moment, and that is pure innocence

    now laugh at yourself, until you cry

    delightenment
    it's all around you
    your ego is
    dumbfounded by
    genuine happiness





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      I think we should all take note of this the message is so clear...Bring back that inner child that lays sleeping inside of us....Awaken an be that child once again...When we become adults we tend to leave the child behind when we should keep the child sprit with us.I believe thats what keeps us young is not taking life so seriously all the time.I had lost the child spirit in me for awhile but slowly she is coming back..She comes out more when i'm around my grandchild.Children have a way of bringing the child out of us adults and it's fun. Take care sweetheart it's a lovely read and one to remember to keep hold of...
    | Posted on 2007-06-15 00:00:00 | by deluka | [ Reply to This ]
      You already know how I feel about this one, Nan; needless to say, you already got three comments from me on the other site you posted this on.

    Just beautiful, dear lady. Bless you again.

    Peace,

    Jase
    | Posted on 2007-05-28 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      Lo0ve it love it love it..Why critique it...I'll just digest it and let it consume me for a while instead Yum! Let the heart speak :)

    Love
    Kate
    | Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
      There's something awkward, in my humble opinion, about "those children", and I don't have any suggestions.

    Otherwise, good take on materialism! I particularly liked "now laugh at yourself until you cry" - it brings to mind someone having an epiphany, realizing how wrong s/he's been in her/his approach to life.
    | Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so where I'm at right NOW - simple, total surrender to the divine and to my inner child who is guiding me with the Universe to a feeling of peace and well being and abundance in all facets of my life.

    I'm reading/working "The Artist's Life" - I had it before but never committed to the work and I'm really finding that, coupled with some other life changes, to be very positive and free and my sleepy child has come awake and is enjoying all the play.

    Thanks for sharing your wise words Nan!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-05-23 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha, I'm happy you posted this on here, Nan, because I need it. I might print it out and post it on my door as a simple reminder. I feel like something has been answered for me, honestly, from this poem. It opens my mind to what poetry really is, and it really says something to me about poetic voice. You are a Goddess, Nan, and now I am going to add this to my favorites list, to tell myself that sometimes you need to go back to when you were young, to find true love.
    Thanks, love
    ~Azura*
    | Posted on 2007-05-23 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      It's easy to get caught up in the roller coaster of maturity and the responsibilites that adulthood brings. It is important now and then to stop and remember the simpler things, the things that came so easy with youth. Before the boundless horizons in front of us came a little closer and got a little narrower. These are the words that I take from this and whole heartedly agree with. Life is not to be taken so seriously.

    I don't know who this is directed at, I'm intrested to know if they've read it though.

    Cheers
    Phil
    | Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by Vastmark | [ Reply to This ]


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