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    dots Submission Name: Let Medots
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    Author: black rose13
    ASL Info:    16/f/where do I live?
    Elite Ratio:    1.35 - 137/97/39
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLet Medots
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    For someone who says they love me.
    You sure have this unique way of showing it.
    Just take my hand
    let me show you what I've been through.

    Let me amaze you with how you treat me.
    Let me mock you of what you've done to me.
    Let me bring fear into your every move.

    As you gaze into my history.
    You will see this life i've tried to leave behind.
    The life of empty love and complex touches.

    Let me amaze you with how you treat me.
    Let me mock you of what you've done to me.
    Let me bring fear into your every move.

    You've raped me of what I used to be.
    You've made me insecure about the way I feel.
    How can you even think I'll forgive you.
    So for the last time...

    Let me amaze you with how you treat me.
    Let me mock you of what you've done to me.
    Let me bring fear into your every move.




    Submitted on 2007-05-22 14:11:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      im always here

    u know that

    erm let me tell you one thing [censored] that b@#%$rd okk you have me and bam bam and other peoples
    | Posted on 2007-07-06 00:00:00 | by truthbetold | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm this was pretty good. I really liked the stanza that you repeated throughout:
    "Let me amaze you with how you treat me.
    Let me mock you of what you've done to me.
    Let me bring fear into your every move."

    I thought it was very well written and had some creative lines very well done!
    | Posted on 2007-07-05 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]


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