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    dots Submission Name: Tonight it endsdots

    Author: I_m not Broken
    ASL Info:    17/F/IDK
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 91/98/68
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTonight it endsdots

    Such a tender wound exposed i have no choice

    Lie to me and close your ears to the truth i try to reveal

    stain my future with these memories of fucking humiliation

    And forgive the sins you cannot deny

    Let go of a past the is consuming your soul

    Forget all the pain i pushed you into against your will

    Die my darling angel for it would be so much quicker

    Than explaining all this misery to eachother

    Disappear forever i request

    You refuse beg and plead for this to go on

    I deny any chance of a future

    insist you cease to know me

    But lives aren't fair to all

    Forget that you have a future

    With me, with anyone

    For tonight it ends

    Submitted on 2007-05-22 14:40:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is actually really good.
    there are usually some types of catagories of style of writing,
    and you just created a new one for me.
    the way you would start off stanzas was really nice and unique.
    and every time you would say "i" it wasn't as if this entire piece was about you.
    it was more about how you felt and a lot of people can't show that very well if they keep using the word "I".
    soo, good job.

    | Posted on 2007-07-10 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      you have a wonderfull way of expressing yourself. a sarcastic disdain for someone holding on just a little to dear. i liked it.
    | Posted on 2007-05-24 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
       The line "Let go of a past the is consuming your soul" is it supposed to be ...that is consuming your soul??? just wondering... wandering.... rambling

    | Posted on 2007-05-24 00:00:00 | by Cricket | [ Reply to This ]

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