Description: This poem is based on the Great Gatsby. This is Gatsby telling his feelings after his death to Daisy. If you haven't read The Great Gatsby by F. Scott Fitzgerald, I suggest it!
The Ride Home -------------------------------------------
I prayed for you under sacred arms
Until my lungs hoarse and throat bleeding in sweet melody
You like to sport your new silk dress
Pressed in Milan, soaked in the blood
Of your morals, now floating face down in a pool of your empty words
If this green wax melted away with the chimes
of an old grandfather clock you burned years ago
then i would die with a laugh in my eyes
But all I was left with was your eyes fading from my framed mirror
a sliver of what once was
All because I was a penny or so short
I’d throw a rock at that green light at your harbor
Mocking me, always, if I had the strength
I’d shower you in diamonds, press you against the gold finish
If only you had waited
But do I even have a face in that cave you call a chest anymore?
All I have now is a house, bloody towels
and full frontal impact.
I have not read this book and it's tempting not to. I was off and away in monochrome cinemascope, the sort that does cleverly allow one other colour to appear as required - green here... Your language and descriptors are really as evocative as that silk dress, that ghost liner steaming into nowhere. The book. Na. No need... K
i really disliked the Great Gatsby when i was a kid...think i'll read it again now. priviledged people always rubbed me the wrong way, so i might've held some prejudice 'gainst him...never quite got old F. Scott. he reminded me of Hemingway (shudders involentarily)...but since you put it that way, i think i'll give him another whirl. oh, and this is yet another one of my faves.
yes! very good. the words you used were very atypical to most other i see on this site. i am very happy i read this. every line has its place and fits wonderfully. i wish i could actuall talk to you to explain every line and why i like them. "All I have now is a house, bloody towels and full frontal impact." amazing. this is a great piece. there is no exact structure which makes is so great. thank you.
You have unbelievable style for a person of your age. I have read some of your other poems before, and they are almost all very good. I would guess that your gift for writing far surpasses my own, but thank you anyway for the favorites post.