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    dots Submission Name: To have you be minedots
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    Author: I_m not Broken
    ASL Info:    17/F/IDK
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 91/98/68
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTo have you be minedots
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    want ??

    Give me reason to stay
    Or give me reason to go
    I can't stay hanging here
    These hands around my throat
    The world is watching....waiting
    for me to faulter just once
    To anger this creature

    Who holds my future

    i'm going through hell
    Running through trying to tell

    Why you aren't here by my side
    Hoping you'll be there at the end
    I will sell my very soul,

    and wait until the end of time
    Only to have you be mine




    Submitted on 2007-05-22 14:41:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      if you are going to write rhyming sorts of poems the key is to watch your meter
    aka time.
    the rhythm of this poem could be a lot better,
    just watch how it sounds when you read it out loud,
    you have to have a kind of flow to it, but anyways, you did a good job here and I like the way you write in any case, I think you could be a good writer.

    good job,


    bill
    | Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]


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