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    dots Submission Name: the improbable black swandots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotsthe improbable black swandots
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    i'm being followed
    by this improbable black swan
    & the way she looks at me
    like some hair was split
    several histories ago
    and turned into her and me

    there is no love between us
    in a vivid haunted way
    just the lucid blocks of ease
    followed by the in betweens

    & i've come to realize
    that i've been following
    this improbable black swan
    towards the gates
    of some heaven
    where
    i
    died




    Submitted on 2007-05-22 19:21:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Again, wonderful title! the last stanza did it all!
    I agree with "in shadow"..
    | Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
      awwww.. :( that brings a tear into my eye. how beauty of the improbable black swan. so beautiful. how dark and haunting. the delightful.

    the ending is so gorgeous. so incredible

    "towards the gates
    of some heaven
    where
    i
    died"

    ah i am in shadow. in your shadow

    i applaud thee
    | Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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