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    dots Submission Name: Broken thoughtsdots
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    Author: Cricket
    ASL Info:    19/F/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    2.48 - 81/51/27
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Rant/Misc
    Total Views: 750
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 790



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       who knows??? not me... seriously who knows?


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    dotsBroken thoughtsdots
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    The broken mirror n my head
    Shattered memories of an old life/lie
    How did I survive this hell
    Have I succeeded in my failure
    I have lost my ability to feel
    Following your confusing footsteps
    Fix this mirror I donít want to see this
    I canít make you conform to me
    There is nothing broken here mama
    Not going to walk around like an addict
    The future looks rather dim for me
    Take it all back make it go away
    When am I going to be something real
    I wonít be your supposed deserter
    Another cold heart no use no compliances
    Make me promise I canít tell
    This agony in my head is nothing
    There will never be another delirious
    Look at all the thoughts they missed




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      And look at all the madness within. Once again good. For a rant that is. Keep the wheels of the mind eternally in motion.





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