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Education as Life?

Author: Ignis Fatuus
ASL Info:    18/m/earth
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Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Misc
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random thought, reflecting on my schooling. Will revise.

Education as Life?

An Object at rest tends to stay at rest
An Object in motion tends to stay in motion.
All higher animals, upon reaching maturity, enter into courship rituals, rivalries are common.
Everything breaks down in time.
Certain chemicals called endorphins cause elation in mammals.
Behavior deemed irrational by others may make sense and actually be entirely sane to a person.
Sanity is not Statistical.
Hark, what light through yonder window breaks, it is the east, and Juliet is the sun.
2+2=5 if you look at it right.
War may be a driving force, but passion causes peacetime creativity.
Machavellie says be feared over loved, and the USSR agreed. Look where that got them.

Submitted on 2007-05-22 21:35:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  By the way, you had some very nice diction and some cool alliteration (like in Bio-Chemistry and English) and stuff, you could probably expand that even further with word choice. I like the capitalization of Objects. Under biology, are you sure a comma would work best there, it is a rather dramatic and a bit of sardonic humor. It would look really cool as it's own biting sentence i think... Since you have two things on English, I might also make it clear how you separate them and all... i dunno about that one. And conclude it creatively if you feel like it, powerfully..... sorry for the double hit :P
| Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by tennisfuzz | [ Reply to This ]
  WOWOWOW! Boy this is absolutely fantastic, i really really like it as an outside reader. I can see how you got inspiration as well though :P.. Yes this is so, good, its just so completely original and very St. Joes as well. I really like the way it's written, and a common theme of relationships and emotions holds the whole thing together... Suggestion wise, I would ad something to do with just plain Art you know... or maybe even Theology, just make sure you have all the subjects you want. Also, look at the order and see if different orders make it more interesting and all. This is better then "random thoughts" and humanities makes me laugh. Love the writer's voice in it . Anyways, this is definitely the best work I've read from you and it was very much a pleasure to read.

:) tennisfuzz
| Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by tennisfuzz | [ Reply to This ]

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