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    dots Submission Name: Antipathydots
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    Author: Lilithe_Aislin
    ASL Info:    20/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    5.19 - 79/67/15
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
    Total Views: 156
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       This life is not worth living...


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    One would never think
    A hate for love so deeply embedded in a soul
    It immobilized, neutralizes any other feeling
    Keeps normal lives from being lived.
    A heart so cold the sun could never touch it.
    But is this antipathy not justified?
    Is it not love that brings the highest heights
    And the deepest depths the next?
    A numb heart wrapped in a blanket of apathy
    Is not strong enough to survive the fall.
    The tears never cease to fall in tragic streams
    Lonely souls will allow themselves to drown.
    A better death than you could impose anyway
    Understanding is lost in waves of faith
    Sometimes love can’t hide from the destruction




    Submitted on 2007-05-23 08:38:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I couldn't agree more. Every word of this is like a reflection of the way I view love, and how you said it is wonderful.
    I hate love, but it still gets to me.

    I want to point out all my favorite parts, but I'd just end up copying and pasting the whole thing, so I'm not going to.

    The beginning grabbed my attention, and everything after that kept it.

    "A numb heart wrapped in a blanket of apathy
    Is not strong enough to survive the fall."

    The truth there is amazing.

    Once again, I have no constructive criticism. It's perfect to me as it is.

    You have a lot of talent, and it shows.
    It's hard to find stuff on here these days that I wholeheartedly enjoy, so thanks for the change.

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2007-11-30 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]
      "A numb heart wrapped in a blanket of apathy
    Is not strong enough to survive the fall."

    I like this thought. It always seemed better to me to let myself experience the whole spectrum of emotion that is natural in life, and not to try to hide, for fear of missing something good. And though some times life just sucks, when you get through those times you're stronger and more free, because you know you can handle it.
    | Posted on 2007-05-23 00:00:00 | by freshcookies | [ Reply to This ]
      Im not sure for whom this poem is about. You or a person you are writting about. I make it my poetic mantra not to comment/critque on poems that express deep hurt, confussion, bitterness etc. Because these poems should be viewed for their theraputic value rather than for their poetic value. Do not get me wrong I am not implying that this piece has no poetic value. I simply state that it is not my placve to comment on its poetry.

    I do say that from my past experiences life moves on, and it gets better, and it gets worse, and then better. It moves in cycles for its own purpose not for our purpose, or wants. Thats the beauty, thats the surprise. Anyway you dont want to hear psycho-babel.
    I pray that your tomorrows are met with greater understanding.
    tinman
    | Posted on 2007-05-23 00:00:00 | by itinnmannn | [ Reply to This ]



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