Once Bitten...

Author: Ben Gunn Elite Ratio:    3.88 - 62 /84 /40 Words: 27

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Once Bitten...

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Once bitten, Twice... ...bitten - Hell, bite me again. and carry on biting - I must like the pain. Ben Gunn 10.05.02

Submitted on 2007-05-23 10:28:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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First of all, I'm not going to go on about ryhme and meter as if this is some really serious poem. I do like it, and it defines alot of people. Remember though, sometimes a bad bite can leave an ugly mark. More seriously, I think you should think about expanding the poem. Some lines that come to mind are "i guess i'm insane", "i'm losing my brain", or maybe "bit straight through the vein". Just for a goof, you know. Just my thought. Its a cute poem like it is.

| Posted on 2007-05-23 00:00:00 | by psychotherapist | [ Reply to This ]

Very cute. I like it. It is a true expression of what people do. I think we all go through some type of pain that we don't want to let go of and we, for some reason, come back to it continuously. This is a short and precise way to say that.

| Posted on 2007-05-23 00:00:00 | by DeeBaby6389 | [ Reply to This ]

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