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    dots Submission Name: Truth Founddots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTruth Founddots
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    Shapes delude me,
    Running after the shapes bringing me to fatigue.
    Images holding dark secrets with in,
    Emanating with forsaken sin.
    Wash the contagious sin away
    Of the imperfect words you say.
    Keep me in falsehood
    Of things that would never be understood.
    You thinking I couldn’t read in the dark,
    I could by the Braille mark.
    You mistook me for a fool,
    My strength baffles you.
    The appetite for knowledge pleased,
    The darkness unveiled truth being the key.




    Submitted on 2004-02-02 15:39:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Overall very good but the rhym sometimes was weaker than others in the poem, very good theough, short and sweet.
    | Posted on 2004-02-03 00:00:00 | by ShadowHarlequin | [ Reply to This ]
      "The darkness unveiled truth being the key." excellent view! very nice imagery! it has a nice flow to it! good write..
    | Posted on 2004-02-02 00:00:00 | by drkpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      I really love this..."shapes delude me"...you have a very original way of using words...keep it up
    | Posted on 2004-02-02 00:00:00 | by caspian | [ Reply to This ]


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