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    dots Submission Name: before i can love youdots
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    Author: DontLetGo421
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 118/238/141
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsbefore i can love youdots
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    i cant help but subside the feelings i had for you
    ive met another, and i'm sure you'll meet one too
    there is no comparison between you and my josh
    but it worries my mom sick because i am only but a frosh

    she says i'm too young, she says i'm being stupid
    but you just cant step aside from the arrow shot by cupid
    i know what i'm doing and i can make up my own mind
    plus i am awware that it is only just a matter of time

    they up and leave without an explanation or a thought
    i never knew the feelings were so intense until they were brought
    i guess i'll have to gain myself before i can gain you
    i guess i'll have to learn to love myself before i can love you




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      I really like the last line of this poem, as it's a good message. However, the rhyme scheme here is very forced sounding. "Josh" and "frosh" is kind of a stretch.
    | Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by lithium_poetry | [ Reply to This ]


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