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    dots Submission Name: One & Onlydots
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    Author: kession
    ASL Info:    18~M~ok
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 115/156/63
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 912
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 924



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    dotsOne & Onlydots
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    with butterflies in his stomach,
    he said i love you,
    sounding really excited,
    she said, love you too.

    he tells her everyday,
    that he loves her, that he cares,
    but sometimes they argue,
    over stupid things
    that wont get them anywhere.

    they've had their ups and downs,
    rough spots here and there,
    but he never stopped loving her,
    and would'nt know what to do
    if she wasn't there.

    she is his whole heart,
    the girl he loves with his all,
    he would be the one to catch her,
    if she ever started to fall.

    he keeps her picture in his wallet,
    to remind him everyday,
    how good he has it,
    and not to let it slip away.

    this poem is for the gril,
    who stole his heart,
    and held it captive,
    from the very start.




    Submitted on 2007-05-23 20:05:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      aww i love it!!! <3
    | Posted on 2007-06-03 00:00:00 | by justkillme08 | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is a nice love poem.
    you could give Hallmark a run for the money.
    I hardly ever see the mushy stuff any more.
    What I mean to say is... that its sweet.
    I'd like to see more of this more often.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2007-05-24 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      awww....
    | Posted on 2007-05-24 00:00:00 | by Cricket | [ Reply to This ]


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