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    dots Submission Name: the nuclear breezedots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 527
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 874



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    dotsthe nuclear breezedots
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    the last day will be the best
    unlike the first
    which started it all

    & with growing unease
    i'll make
    the
    days
    go
    away
    like bees floating on a nuclear breeze

    it's odd how things twist
    the way that they do
    & my singing eyes
    like dragons erupting in my blood again

    i've built fires
    with better pyramids before
    & the flashy little spheres
    that go in your ears
    are resting
    in the cupboard
    with your tears

    there's a fear in knowing
    that one must know
    how to proceed
    especially when the only direction
    one seems to encounter
    is
    down




    Submitted on 2007-05-23 23:18:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      perhaps i sound foolish, and perhaps you think me nothing for i have nothing, but my mind feels at home a i read your words
    "i'll make
    the
    days
    go
    away"

    if only someone had promised me that...so long ago..


    bravo.
    | Posted on 2007-06-18 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey I thought I saw you on the news a couple days ago and his name was Mathew too. it sorta looked like you..maybe it was..

    This is very nice as welll! it's like you have to know how to read your work so it doesn't sound confusing.

    props props
    | Posted on 2007-05-29 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]


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