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    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
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    Description:
       Another story about Truth


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    A man once sat alone, drenched deep with sadness.
    and all the animals drew near him and said:
    "we do not like to see you so sad...ask us for whatever you wish and you shall have it."
    The Man said:"I want to have good sight"
    The vulture replied: " You shall have mine"
    The Man said: " I want to be strong"
    The Jaguar said: "you shall be strong like me"
    The man said: I long to see the secrets of the earth"
    The serpent said: "I'll show them to you"
    And so it went with all the animals
    and when the man had all the gifts that
    they could give, he left.
    Then the owl said to the animals: "Now the man knows much and is able to do many things, suddenly I am afraid."
    The deer said: " He has all that he needs. Now his sadness can stop.
    But the owl replied: "No, I saw a hole in that man, deep like hunger, it will never fill...It is what makes him sad and makes him want.
    He will go on taking and taking, until one day the World will say, "I am no more and have nothing left to give."




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      This is really good...It opens your eyes to the truth of a persons soul...no matter how much someone has they will always want more but will never be satisfied until they have the one thing that may never come...thank you for this story and I hope that more people will learn the meaning of it...

    ~Katie~
    | Posted on 2007-07-28 00:00:00 | by Lover girl | [ Reply to This ]


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