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    dots Submission Name: Inside The Room, Locked...The Artist perspectivedots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       OKay so I have to go back and check some things...this is the beginning, don't pay too much mind to it because it isnt nearly finished.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsInside The Room, Locked...The Artist perspectivedots

    "So why are we all here?" asked the Philosopher.

    "We're here for Derrick." Abuser replied.

    "Should I even be here?" Diffident asked.

    "Well obviously, cunt rag, we should or we wouldn't be. We're all here for a purpose" replied Thinker.

    "What is our purpose?" asked the Philosopher.

    "Our purpose," replied the artist,"is to wait for Derrick, and he shouldn't be long...surely it won't take him long to get to this point, after all we all sort lead him in here."

    Submitted on 2007-05-24 10:00:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i think i remember reading this a long time ago and waiting to comment until it was continued
    ah well
    i like it, but i wish there was more....
    very thoughtful, a nice play on derricks piece, and introduction to the characters without taking away from his perspective of them

    | Posted on 2007-09-12 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      Hee hee...

    I like it.

    So very deep, Jaz...

    even with the use of the term "cunt rag"...
    | Posted on 2007-09-08 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      This will be a rewarding and insightful exercise - I was just reading another piece and there were the many elements of "self" and how we battle and concede to them when all we have to do is just give in to "IT".

    I'm working "The Artist's Way" right now and it deals a lot with our own inner demons and self-sabotaging characters and how we don't elevate ourselves as artists but condemn ourselves.

    Let me know if and when you add to this - I'd like to take another gander.

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    | Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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