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Wrinkled Collars and 3pm lust


Author: all the english boys
ASL Info:    15
Elite Ratio:    2.76 - 173 /239 /46
Words: 144
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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ohhh snap.


Wrinkled Collars and 3pm lust



the stereo blasts our song
all i can feel is the bass
a steady tempo, heavy on the upbeats
heavy on top of me
the highlights are those lips
the lower one is bigger than the top
i bite my lips in anticipation of a kiss
one that lasts for twenty minutes
and neither of breathes, nowhere we have to be
so give us another hour
locked alone together
humidity in the rooms rising, wrinkling our collars
resting their buttons on the side of your bed
i close my eyes, feel your longing stare trace my outline
i feel the heat flush my skin, now red and raw
i know this is too early, too young
but it's love, for sure, i can feel it among my hips
the moans speak of devotion
the lust speaks of redemption
and baby, we're just getting started




Submitted on 2004-06-14 22:49:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  OK, I just decided to stop by and read one of your poems and this is the one I picked. I won't say it's bad, 'cause it isn't, but I will say that you're bad. Just a wee tad bit young there. I feel all dirty even reading this from you.

It is very good though.
| Posted on 2004-06-30 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]


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