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    dots Submission Name: Solitudedots
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    Author: Mieko
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 253/209/99
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       Free write, while listening to a piano song by the same title. :P


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    dotsSolitudedots
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    So you cried until you were satisfied,
    The tears almost stained your face permanently,
    I'm telling you to be careful.

    Start and begin,
    Hear the softness of it all because there is no way not to fall for it, it's seizing and never displeasing, a gradual realization.

    I love listening to the wind and I love feeling this lonesome pain, but only if there's two sides to it, only if I feel comforted in knowing that maybe for a minute, I'm really not alone...

    Sometimes it all collides in a brilliant chorus, and sometimes the melancholy breaks the solitude. You can't leave me, alright? You're my hero, and heroes never die...

    Just once let me know I'm not really alone.




    Submitted on 2007-05-24 17:25:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "I love listening to the wind and I love feeling this lonesome pain, but only if there's two sides to it, only if I feel comforted in knowing that maybe for a minute, I'm really not alone..."

    I really connected to this piece and to our human cry for being and for love - I'm also learning that alone - isn't lonely - lonely is a condition we put ourselves in out of fear.

    I really liked this piece and paused for great reflection!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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