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    dots Submission Name: An Eternal Penetrationdots

    Author: Mr. Creep
    ASL Info:    16. Female. Here
    Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 96/177/112
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Its been a long time I know. But heres another insane one of mine that you may think makes no sense, but makes sense to me.

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    dotsAn Eternal Penetrationdots

    The sun penatrated my lids as I awoke,
    then like a burning autopsy, I saw your insides.

    Gazing as silence crept through the air,
    my seizures ached to be removed.
    Yet only as your eyes waste the day,
    they remained dormont in my veins.

    Only still I wished to corrupt those perfect organs.
    Still I wanted to tear a hole in your trachea
    and fuck it untill you breathe cum.
    But your eyes, a peircing flesh cold, held me still, they held me close.

    And as my internal yearning functioned correct, so did your will to disconnect.
    And I never let you.
    For as the sun disappeared over the grave horizon, your lids shut, and I was free.

    Submitted on 2007-05-24 17:50:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice poem. I like that you are successful and free at the end. of the poem.
    | Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      Still I wanted to tear a hole in your trachea
    and [censored] it untill you breathe cum.

    stinking linesw but I thought the imagery was amazing lol.

    Yeah its your head so if it makes sense to you who cares who else makes sense of it!
    | Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]

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