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    dots Submission Name: Hell-worthy Trespassdots
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    Author: Silenced poet
    ASL Info:    21/male/oregon
    Elite Ratio:    2.54 - 52/41/21
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 1047
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1140



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       Just some more shit i wrote


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    dotsHell-worthy Trespassdots
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    Wander with me, fearful friend,
    into the depths of hell.
    Walk through the gates of fiery trespass,
    a path i know quite well.
    Take my hand and follow me,
    we will only be a minute.
    Trust me now, we wont be long,
    or like me you'll be stuck in it.
    In this short time I'll show u things,
    that murderers would fear.
    Like death in masses so absurd,
    and screams the deaf could surely hear.
    You'll see what happens to the damned,
    when there's no more time to waste.
    How demons hands tear hearts of man,
    and then savor in the taste.
    They'll be no secrets shuned from you,
    and death shall know thy name.
    So come with me now, dont be scared,
    it's just a little pain.
    A little blood, a little gore,
    and surely agony.
    OH NO we've been here much too long,
    it seems your stuck like me.
    But worry not I'll keep you safe,
    for it is me who got u stuck.
    Oh nevermind, I'll eat your soul,
    5 sec. head start, good luck.




    Submitted on 2007-05-24 21:08:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      what in the world?
    poetry from a little girl
    why do you even bother?
    like single men tell your mother
    you couldnt read in an old folks home
    you picked it up
    they said leave it alone
    stone temple pilot
    i got it
    whats new in your abuse
    of the english language
    so languish, fan
    and wonder who i am
    hard hittin man
    you couldnt see
    put you on your knees with just one verse
    put you in the towel then put you in the herse
    verse killer wanna be
    just to come to elite skills
    you have to pay a fee
    crackhead
    leave it alone
    before you get the heavy breathin on the phone
    then call your dad
    and say your scared
    to-wits comin
    and it aint fair
    your page reads like gay porn
    another street performer born


    | Posted on 2007-06-28 00:00:00 | by to-wit | [ Reply to This ]
      terrible towel stuff.maybe it would work in pittsburgh
    | Posted on 2007-06-28 00:00:00 | by to-wit | [ Reply to This ]
      you said it was just some [censored] you wrote but i like your [censored]... and i am not just saying that because i am a positive person because i m not ... not positive or a person...
    | Posted on 2007-05-24 00:00:00 | by Cricket | [ Reply to This ]


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