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    dots Submission Name: I'm That Persondots
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    Author: Silenced poet
    ASL Info:    21/male/oregon
    Elite Ratio:    2.54 - 52/41/21
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 785
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    dotsI'm That Persondots
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    Whispered screams,
    choking night.
    Endless fears,
    no hope in sight.
    Jumbled words,
    and mismatched phrases.
    Nothing matters,
    nothing changes.
    Nothing betters,
    always worsens.
    Can you see me,
    I'm that person.
    Crying loudly,
    thoughts unspoken.
    Only written,
    always broken.
    Never caring,
    so others suffer.
    I'm not a father,
    wont make a mother.
    Wont make a promise,
    i know Ill break.
    Whats gladly given,
    I'll probably take.
    I'm not a man,
    I'm just a beast.
    But by my own hand,
    I'll die at least.




    Submitted on 2007-05-24 21:19:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      personable
    | Posted on 2007-06-23 00:00:00 | by to-wit | [ Reply to This ]
      dude I really [censored] like this... alot of the [censored] thats on this website sucks now it use to be alright but now ugggg....um...oh yeah... I like most of what you wright I use to write stuff along those lines but I am no longer allowed to... Keep on wrighting you made my day it is now friday ...

    -cricket
    | Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by Cricket | [ Reply to This ]


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