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    dots Submission Name: Stormdots
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    Author: skinnard
    ASL Info:    22 male New York
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 38/76/49
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 130
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 561



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       its one of my older ones. i dont really like it that much but let me know wat you think


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    dotsStormdots
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    Caught in the wind
    Lost in a storm
    Misdirected
    To which there is no return

    The blizzard hits
    And snow piles high
    Freezing, shaking
    Hoping to die

    Everything freezes
    And I hear feint laughter
    Lightning strikes
    And with ice, my heart shatters

    The winds pick up
    Rain burns like acid
    Shelter me now
    Set me off in my casket

    Then sand forms around
    And blinds my eyes
    All goes black
    I wonder, have I died




    Submitted on 2007-05-24 22:01:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow i loved this. so cool how you connected it with the weather. really good job
    | Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by DontLetGo421 | [ Reply to This ]
      pretty good, i could somewhat feel i was in the environment you were describing as i read. you didn't spell faint right though in the third stanza, second line. good job.
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
      
    its cool but i feel that the audience plays a very sacro sant role in any work of arts so tell me what was your message ? but in all it was cool
    | Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by kingsley | [ Reply to This ]



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