Storm by skinnard

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Submission Name: Storm dots

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Author:	skinnard
ASL Info:	22 male New York
Elite Ratio:	2.17 - 38/76/49
Words:	79

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	808
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	561

Description:
its one of my older ones. i dont really like it that much but let me know wat you think

Storm

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Caught in the wind
Lost in a storm
Misdirected
To which there is no return

The blizzard hits
And snow piles high
Freezing, shaking
Hoping to die

Everything freezes
And I hear feint laughter
Lightning strikes
And with ice, my heart shatters

The winds pick up
Rain burns like acid
Shelter me now
Set me off in my casket

Then sand forms around
And blinds my eyes
All goes black
I wonder, have I died

Submitted on 2007-05-24 22:01:52 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!

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  wow i loved this. so cool how you connected it with the weather. really good job
| Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by DontLetGo421 | [ Reply to This ]
  pretty good, i could somewhat feel i was in the environment you were describing as i read. you didn't spell faint right though in the third stanza, second line. good job.
</3 lisa
| Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]

its cool but i feel that the audience plays a very sacro sant role in any work of arts so tell me what was your message ? but in all it was cool
| Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by kingsley | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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