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    dots Submission Name: Flatlined Lullaby'sdots
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    Author: rAbit
    ASL Info:    18/m/Tx
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 84/91/38
    Words: 206
    Class/Type: Lyrics/I hate you
    Total Views: 81
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1208



    Description:
       ...Talking Shit, And Pulling A Trigger


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    dotsFlatlined Lullaby'sdots
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    don't look at me, get away from me.
    don't look at me, you took too much.
    don't look at me, so get the fuck away from me.
    it's time to shine, so lean your head back just right
    open your eyes wide, i'll promise not to let you die
    heavily induced in denile of open ended conversations, I tried
    and Plus I lied, when i promise not to let you die
    it's mental disorders gone terribly wrong, repressed decisions left unsaid
    and i'll remember to say goodbye
    i'll remember to say goodbye,
    when you close your eyes,
    but i'm to far to speak, so listen hard
    and i'll remember to say goodbye
    i'll remember to say goodbye
    when you finially die
    you forgot to let go, you wanted me in your hands
    but it's to late, I slipped through, and you forgot.
    you didn't make the scene on time.
    I flatlined before you knew even I died
    I'm a half written lullaby
    but I said goodbye
    I flutter in the moment, you left me in the dry
    I cried when you survived caused I wished you fuckin' died.




    Submitted on 2007-05-24 22:54:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was written very well. I liked it alot especially the last four lines, I think those were the best. But I also think that you should put a little more background in it. Give it a little more feeling and meaning. Other than that they were great lyrics. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading.

    Saint Raxor
    | Posted on 2007-05-26 00:00:00 | by brknprclndol | [ Reply to This ]
      this is so [censored] wrong... I cant wright [censored] like this because you dont want me to go down that narly ass road again but you can because nothing has happened w/yours cause it wasnt to bad??? babe I m not mad but it doesnt make sence to me...this vacummes like a hover on a sunday...

    -cricket
    | Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by Cricket | [ Reply to This ]



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