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    dots Submission Name: Slaughter the lambsdots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSlaughter the lambsdots
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    Caress the softness of true inspiration
    and stroke the heart's tales into reality.
    Feeling wanders
    the labyrinth of the soul
    dusting the gatherings
    of the archetypal realms
    with a midas touch.

    Smiles of truth can be ugly at first glance
    and dancing with the devil shrivels faint egos
    like salted slugs.
    He goes...
    ...and she goes,
    Sheroes and heroes one and all,
    driven by the call...in.

    Manic or shamanic?
    Just who is it that judges it mad?

    In the half life of days veiled by misty logic,
    many walk around half dead
    like zombie sheep
    chasing manufactured pipe-dream tails.
    Only when the lambs are slaughtered
    can inner transformations, raise vibrations,
    and open sleepy eyes
    to the delusions eaten from society's vast table.

    Pepper then my food, with myths and fairytales,
    and quench my thirsts on poetry and metaphor,
    lest I too become lazily slug-like
    resting my laurels in normality's strangling embrace,
    while my soul withers from lack of salt.




    Submitted on 2007-05-25 05:08:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      THis piece was probably so intimidaing to the first readers that they were in awe and without proper comment!

    This was very spot on and filled with introspection out - yes, turning your "self" inside out and staring each our own demons in the face and living fearless and sometimes paralyzed by fear is maddness and once one goes through "IT" and sees the lies and the truths and everything just "IS" and the dreaded suffering is experience of limitation and we surrender to the source of our divinity and come through the forest as One illuminated and universal energy.....I loved your maniac or Shamanic line and the whole piece.

    You had several clever and illuminating words to share. Great!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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