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    dots Submission Name: Dinosaur (Written by my 5 year old daughter) dots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 668
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 654



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       I helped my daughter by asking how she felt, saw and heard a dino...she gave me what to write...and I honored what she gave by not changing it..except I did add "most definitely"


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    dotsDinosaur (Written by my 5 year old daughter) dots
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    ROAR!!!

    STOMP!!

    Bigger than a house
    Most defnitely bigger than a mouse

    Bubbly skin
    Teeth as shiny as glass
    Claws as white as snow
    Teeth as SHARP as glass

    Long nose
    Spikey toes
    Grey dinosaur
    Stinky breath
    Waggley tail,
    Just like normal tails,
    But BIGGER.

    Slurp! Slurping water
    Rumbley, tumbley tummies.

    I'd show him
    Ripping up a big tree
    I'd wack him over the shoulder...

    ...but really I would run away...

    ...probably!





    Submitted on 2007-05-25 05:26:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      
    She didn't miss a thing and the detail is astonishing. I liked the fact that she used glass twice to illustrate shiny and sharp. And she is
    both of these traits.

    So when do we see another poem from her, Kate? I'm seriously impressed because it's just the whole truth.

    love,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      If we all kept in touch with our being of these young and beautiful child times I love the spontanaity and the observation - wonderful!
    All of the children should be encouraged in expression and creativity as should adults!

    Tell her bravo!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      wow! shes got talent. This made my morning for sure. Her analogies are better than some people on this website.
    | Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by Halston | [ Reply to This ]


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