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    dots Submission Name: A heart always breaks dots
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    Author: bleeding_sin
    ASL Info:    16/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 54/68/57
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 535
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1034



    Description:
       I have a new BF. His name is Del and he is 14. I haven't seen him in two days. Today will be the thrid day. I love him very much. And I don't know if he loves me too? I just don't want to get hurt.


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    dotsA heart always breaks dots
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    My heart is breaking slowly,
    So slowly it still beats with your touch,
    And when your is gone from mine
    All I can do is cry tears at night.

    Why of this insainty you would pick me,
    I'm not even pretty or skiny,
    My hairs a mess and even with make up on i'm still me,
    Why do you stay ?
    Why don't you just walk away.

    No one could love me
    With the way I am.
    All these mistakes
    I can't play anyway

    I'm just me and your you
    Beautiful in everyway
    Your eyes glow with the love of anew

    But i'm too afriad to gert close
    My heart was just whole
    Don't break it please
    I'll let you see it just don't hurt me

    I'll take a leap of faith
    A lesson of trust
    But when my heart bust
    I'll say to you:
    Love is only as weak as the person that carries it, breaking the heart was only the game.




    Submitted on 2007-05-25 10:25:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      there were some minor spelling and grammar issues but other than that and the flow was a little off in some stanzas, you did a very nice job. i can get the meaning from the poem very well. it was good. keep writing. id like to see more. good luck with everything.
    | Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by bleedinbabygrl8 | [ Reply to This ]


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