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    dots Submission Name: Friendlier and Frienddots
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    Author: DanceADream
    ASL Info:    16 f canada
    Elite Ratio:    5.05 - 205/153/29
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 922
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 619



    Description:
       lol man, It is so hard to like a guy, who is your friend, and have the same feeling returned... guess it just doesn't happen


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    dotsFriendlier and Frienddots
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    I wish I could make you smile
    Even brighter then she ever did
    Months of waiting behind closed doors
    The secrets, my lips forbid.

    I felt like it would never end
    But friends donít impose
    They never shed a hint of truth
    Or a word to oppose

    The hardest place to be
    Is between friendlier, and friend
    No way to say your part
    No room to contend
    And what if you donít feel that way too?
    Then my confidence is left to mend
    Better to keep all quiet
    And sit behind the line of friendlier and friend.




    Submitted on 2007-05-25 15:13:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You do a great job of expressing how liking a friend feels, I've been in that position before. It flows alright up until the last four lines, I'd suggest to change the wording to make the lines shorter. Other than the flow, I think this poem is pretty good.

    Peace,
    Love,
    And weed for all!
    | Posted on 2007-05-26 00:00:00 | by Magic Dragon | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow,this is best and prob one of the only peoms I have ever read that TRUELLY convey that message,that feeling of liking a friend!

    Sweet child,I love you!!

    I can't really pick at antything though.The ryhme scheme is weird..But that doesn't matter.I guess I could say it's perfect.I really do love it.I understand how you feel and I can tell this comes from the heart.

    That's wonderful.

    All I have to say is don't be scared.You have nothing to be scared of ...Other than losing a friend.And if you do,then that's not a very good friend.Just go talk to him...Unless,you already have then...

    <22 Tsuba
    | Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by LRRolins | [ Reply to This ]


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