Description: lol man, It is so hard to like a guy, who is your friend, and have the same feeling returned... guess it just doesn't happen
Friendlier and Friend -------------------------------------------
I wish I could make you smile
Even brighter then she ever did
Months of waiting behind closed doors
The secrets, my lips forbid.
I felt like it would never end
But friends don’t impose
They never shed a hint of truth
Or a word to oppose
The hardest place to be
Is between friendlier, and friend
No way to say your part
No room to contend
And what if you don’t feel that way too?
Then my confidence is left to mend
Better to keep all quiet
And sit behind the line of friendlier and friend.
You do a great job of expressing how liking a friend feels, I've been in that position before. It flows alright up until the last four lines, I'd suggest to change the wording to make the lines shorter. Other than the flow, I think this poem is pretty good.
Wow,this is best and prob one of the only peoms I have ever read that TRUELLY convey that message,that feeling of liking a friend!
Sweet child,I love you!!
I can't really pick at antything though.The ryhme scheme is weird..But that doesn't matter.I guess I could say it's perfect.I really do love it.I understand how you feel and I can tell this comes from the heart.
That's wonderful.
All I have to say is don't be scared.You have nothing to be scared of ...Other than losing a friend.And if you do,then that's not a very good friend.Just go talk to him...Unless,you already have then...
Submission Name: Friendlier and Friend
